Week 8 feedback

i've been given some helpful feedback on constructing my sentance in order to make this topic make sense.

i've relised i need to focus on a moment in a students transistion to adulthood, so I'll focus on the moment of living away from home. I want to target my audience when they are already in a flat as this is the most common time they feel unprepared or anxious about topics like, taxes, getting a job, money etc. They also don't have easy access to their parents or family when they need help with these topics.